Thursday, 21 February 2013

A solitary soliloquy


A lone figure on a despondent path
Strewn with dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts.
A tiny traveller on a grief struck road
Adorned with specs of hate and denial as loneliness holds.

The little guy looks for the fingers he held,
And the shoulders that always carried him well.
But all he sees is a despondent path,
Strewn with dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts.

Until the alarm brings him back
To his own older and lonely self
As the dream ends and a tangible nightmare begins,
Abandoned on a despondent path,
Strewn with dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts.

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I know it's supposed to be only five sentences. But once the words started coming I couldn't stop. So here are two other paragraphs that I had to 'cut' out of this flash. 

A dying hope in his faltering heart,
For a better tomorrow, a fresh start.
But all there is is a despondent path,
Strewn with dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts.

The solitary figure hesitates to walk,
The future sealed with a deadly lock.
As he limps on a despondent path,
Strewn with dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts...

13 comments:

  1. When I read your post, I immediately thought of The Beatle's song, "One Is The Loneliness Number". When there is not a single individual that someone can turn to in their time of need; then they truly have been abandoned.

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  2. Hooked me in with the first two lines, loved it, awesome stuff

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  3. I really enjoyed reading this and was only disappointed it was for five sentence fiction and not a little longer! lol

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    1. I had a hard time trimming it down to five sentences. Glad you enjoyed it!

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  4. Beautiful, and could absolutely be a song.

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  5. Very sad and disturbing. Well done.

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  6. "Dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts"... an excellent refrain for such a well written piece!

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  7. 'Strewn with dead leaves and twigs and an uncertainty that lasts...' a wonderful line and I love the repetition, works beautifully to show the despondency of loneliness.
    Some great imagery too Sania, I followed him down the path...

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  8. What a beautifully sad poem, so well written with great imagery and use of repetition. x

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